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"Once Upon a Time... The Tragic Tale of a Broken World"


once, i awoke with the sun
and through my open window,
cool winds carressed my face,
breezes whispering their secrets
and i heard their words.

once, i climbed the tallest mountain
And laid down on its peak
pressing my ear to its wise stone form
i listened to its story:

Once, a little boy screamed
Parents fighting
Signing papers in permanent ink
Showering him with gifts,
Trying to outdo one another.
Fighting over his attention,
But never showing love.
Leaving a $20 bill with a note-
"I'll be home late, don't wait up."
Telling lies about each other
In the name of custody.
So, Never having felt so lonely,
He puts a pistol to his head
And silently prepares to pull the trigger.
"All I ever wanted...
For you to love me, and love each other.
That's all I ever asked for."
And, through the mountain,
I heard him cry a little.

Once, a lonely girlfriend screamed.
Her welfare boyfriend,
So in love
Only wanting the best for her
Knowing she deserves the stars
And every diamond money can buy,
He knows he's not enough.
Leaving tear stains on a note-
"You deserve the world
And everything I can't afford.
You can do so much better.
So with these final words, I leave.
Goodbye, my love.  goodye."
Once, a lonly girlfriend screamed.
"All i ever wanted...
for you to love me, to love each other
That's all I ever asked for."
And through the mountain,
I heard her cry a little.

Once, a heart-broken savior cried.
A world he created
brimming with greens and reds
and all the colors of natural beauty,
torn apart by recklesness
and all "in the name of God"
everything spoiled
a washed-away note He wrote in the sand-
"Is nothing sacred anymore?"
"Holy Wars," denominations
When the message is supposed to be love.
it's bad enough to kill each other,
but do to it in My name?
why does religion leads to fighting,
and the need to prove each other wrong/
once, a heart-broken savior screamed.
"all i ever wanted...
for you to love Me, and love each other
that's all i ever asked for."
and through the mountain,
I heard Him cry a little.

Once, I felt my body tremble
and on that tall mountain ledge,
i looked toward the sky.
somewhere, a little boy's ghost listens
somewhere, a lonely ex-girlfriend listens
somewhere, a heart-broken savior listens
"all i ever wanted...
for you to love me, and love each other.
that's all i ever asked for."
and through the mountain...
i think they heard me cry a little.
full title: "Once upon a time... The Tale of a Broken World"

umm its kinda like ... part of it is metaphors and part of it is truth. this is the world. i know its long but please please please be patient and read it all. please.
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luthienferfalas Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2008
It is amazing.....
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buraqina Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2004
Wow, great! :D You have a great style and a lot of talent :hug: Keep up the great work, this is another for my faves! :)

:blackrose: ~Buraqina
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VedmaDetya Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2004
wow i seriously just got chills. That was so deep and the emotion is SO strong, that was an amazing peice! You have a lot of talent!

-Vedma
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The-Other-Molly Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2004
Wow...
This is rather good. You have a writting style. Mind if I print it out and show it to a friend?

Molly
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daylightfading Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2004
of course not!! do what you want with it :) thank you very much for the compliment and comment !
:hug:
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CharukyraaliaKaeyla Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2004
Can I draw you a pic for it?
I think every poem deserves an art thingy to go with it ;)
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:icondaylightfading:
daylightfading Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2004
ha... well sure you can !! *hug* thanks...
:D
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CharukyraaliaKaeyla Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2004
AWWW!!! :aww: this is AWWWWESOME!!!!! :aww: I love it!!! ^_^ I LOOVE IT!!!! :heart: I dunno if I will fav it...I might!!!
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:icondaylightfading:
daylightfading Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2004
thank you!!!!!! and thank you for faving it!!!
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truckie Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2004
that was really good. i enjoyed it a lot. the repetition was nice. i love it. very nice! after reading that i think i'll devwatch you! wow aren't you lucky :p
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